Hot task

 

In class, we have been doing a cold task to find out what we already know. 

We are learning to self-assess our writing so we know what we are good at and what we need to work on.

I want to improve my writing by having an interesting hook and having short sentences for impact using show not tell and figurative language. 

HOT TASK TERM 2 2022 NARRATIVE 

Write a narrative, this could be a story you make up or a whanau story you retell.

Name: Kobe

In the holidays I went to the Rainbow end with my family. We finally arrived at our destination Rainbows end! So we got into rainbows end and the first ride we went onto was the simple log ride. The line for that was massive, there were these two little boys in front of us that were jumping, climbing around everywhere. It started to annoy me. I was getting mad. 

Lucas and his family also came so after the Log ride I ran straight to the Stratispear we had to go on the easy mode cause I was a couple inches shorter so it was dumb. This was the exciting part we went to the fear fall. We waited 15 minutes for the line we got on to go to the top. We dropped I blackout as soon as we dropped.

We made it to the ground. I woke up and everyone’s face looked terrified, Sydnee-jo said ‘‘that was one of the scariest rides I have ever been on’’, Lucas had blacked out also, and untie Kelly was just screaming and swearing the whole time. Everyone's eyes were watering when they got off. What was dumb is I missed the whole ride cause I blacked out. We all got off my eyes were watering so hard from that crazy journey down. Next, we went to the roller coaster we waited for ages the line was all the way at the bottom of the stairs Lucas started to quit when we were halfway through the line everyone else was so excited even myself. We were next in line when we got on me and Sydnee-jo were at the front so it would be scarier we left out slowly then it started to pick up some pace and then BOOM we went flying around and around screaming our heads off the ride was only about five seconds long. 

We got off and, Sydnee-jo, Kyrie, and untie Kelly ran to the invader right well not untie Kelly because she had a sore foot. The line was massive but luckily the invader ride had heaps of seats so the line went fast. We all went on every single ride except Lucas and Jasper. Lucas was like ‘‘oh Nah I’m gonna throw up Nah look that goes way too high and it even spins nope I'm not going on that.’’ It was such a crazy day everyone enjoyed the day spending time and having fun with their families and going on all the crazy rides.

We had finished the day off by going on the bumper boats cause we would get wet it was so crazy Kyrie got stuck so she was just going around in circles it was crack up as I smashed into Sydnee-jo so hard she got soaked and Lucas was crashing into everyone he was laughing so hard we all almost ended up peeing out pants cause it was so funny and that was the end of our amazing day at rainbow’s end.